Thursday, January 15, 2009
Youtube and Myspace BLOCKED... Is it really that big of a deal?
I still remember the confusion, anger, and frustration I felt the first week of school when I tried to watch "Evolution of Dance" on Youtube, only to find it was blocked by the BYU Network. Outrage seeped through me even more, when I tried to log on to Myspace, and realized that, also, had been unfairly taken away from me. What was going on with this school? After cooling off from those first terrible experiences, I started to think about why they were blocked, and slowly came to the realization that maybe BYU knew what they were doing. I remember back home, I would spend mindless hours on Youtube watching monkeys throwing their own feces, and people popping zits in mirrors. Is this a valuable way to spend your time at college? Also, we, or at least I, have been warned by our bishops and stake presidents to delete our Myspace accounts, the reason being it can lead to worse things such as pornography, and also creeps who stalk girls. Now, the question still remains, should Myspace and Youtube be unblocked? Are we mature enough to be able to choose which websites we would like to spend our time on, and strong enough to resist the temptations of those websites? Myspace and Youtube should remain blocked, for the reasons listed above, and for other contributing arguments.
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Websites are sometimes blocked for reasons you don't consider. Using youtube causes massive amounts of data to come through the network. The network can only process a certain amount of data per second, and requesting too much data would slow the network down. Considering the popularity of youtube, I would bet that allowing it would freeze the entire network.
That could be fixed if BYU invested millions in a new network, but I'd rather pay low tuition!
One thing I really liked about this first paragraph was your use of pathos. In the first few sentences you talked about how frustrating it was for you not to be able to look up that dance thing. That struck me emotionally because I had the same experience and it rang true to me. Good use of emotion.
I enjoyed your first paragraph. I think this is a good topic because it is a debatable one. I like that you started by relating how you originally felt because most people probably felt the same way. I think you can definitely persuade a lot of readers to your view with your said arguments.
I like your topic; it is definitely arguable and I think the BYU audience can relate really well to it. The only suggestion I have is to maybe save your arguments against YouTube and MySpace for the body of your paper when you can fully discuss them.
I agree with the other posts--you did choose a good, debatable argument, and I think it will be very possible for you to convince your BYU audience to stop complaining and being upset about it.
Two thoughts. First, you may want to focus more specifically to students who live on campus, because those who live off campus don't really care any more because it no longer effects them--they can now get it at home. Second, you may want to save some of the details you've addressed in the first paragraph for later in the opinion editorial--key to your intro is to introduce your issue, keep your reader interested, and start making a strong argument. You may want to save "pornography, and also creeps who stalk girls" to develop in a later paragraph as a really strong point and perhaps only allude to the fact that the block does protect/shield us from some problems.
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