Thesis:
The severity of obesity is a problem that not only the United States faces, but one that the globe faces. Countries across the globe are experiencing greater trends in obesity. This appearance of obesity can be contributed to the societal changes these countries are undergoing, mainly the United States' influence with fast food restaurants and lifestyle. Acknowledging the issue at hand, our country, as well as other countries across the globe, can make changes to lessen the amount of obesity seen and encourage a healthier lifestyle.
Intro
· Break up into 2 paragraphs
· 1st paragraph be brief intro leading into thesis
· 2nd paragraph give background info on obesity to get reader on same page
o Reader will feel comfortable enough with the overall topic of obesity and be ready for more details
Obesity in the US
· Obesity specifically in the US
· Statistics showing trends in obesity over the past years that demonstrate how bad of a problem it is
· Causes of obesity in US
o Who is at risk
o Fast food
o Sedentary lifestyle, etc.
Obesity in Australia
· Obesity specifically in Australia
· Not only US faces problem
· Specialists ideas on why it has developed to where it has today
Obesity in China
· More China has taken on mainstream companies like fast food restaurants, the more China is faced with obesity
· Negative effect of this, health wise
Obesity in Japan
· Appearance of fast food restaurants and affects on Japan
· Different perspectives – offer counter arguments
UK
· Advertising to children – fast food
· Negative effect
· Health problems, obesity
Global Perspective
· Overall trend seen across the globe
· Wrap it up
· Connect to thesis
· Show obesity is global problem
· Reasons it has gotten so bad
How to Change
· Identify problem – show how it can be solved
· What needs to be done – how we can help
Conclusion
· Connect back to thesis
· Strong argument
· Wrap it up
· Connect all the dots
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2 comments:
I thought you did a good job in addressing your topic in your thesis. The only thing that I think you could improve on was in you outline. It was a great outline overall, but it seems that you could probably have a stronger paper if you somehow tie back each set of information on the countries listed to your thesis. This could be done by either addressing counter arguments or simply making a reference back to to your thesis.
I definitely agree with you. I need to work on figuring out how I can strongly tie things back to my thesis. I am kind of stressed about this paper. I don't know how I will be able to write eight pages on this topic. I hope that my thesis is strong enought and that my arguments will be logical and make sense.
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