Differences in Style

Professional vs. Student

Total number of words: 307 v. 914
Total number of sentences: 15 v. 41
Longest sentence (in # of words): 42 v. 61
Shortest sentence (in # of words): 3 v. 7
Average sentence length: 20 v. 22
Number of sentences w/ more than 10 words over the average length: 3 v. 6
Percentage of sentences w/ more than 10 words over the average: 20% v. 15%
Number of sentences w/ more than 5 words below the average: 3 v.15
Percentage of sentences w/ more than 5 words below the average: 20% v. 36%
Paragraph Length
Longest Paragraph (in # of sentences): 4 v. 9
Shortest Paragraph (in # of sentences): 2 v. 6
Average Paragraph (in # of sentences): 2.5 v. 6

The differences in writing style between my opinion editorial and the professional opinion editorial is pretty noticeable. In the professional’s writing, he was very concise and to the point. The writer was sure to only include significant information. I can tell that in my writing, I use a lot of “filler”. I think my problem is that I need to do a better job editing and taking out information that is not important and only leave the sentences and words that help my writing.