Total number of words 1,743 vs. 861
Total number of sentences 45 vs. 25
Longest sentence 60 vs. 46
Shortest sentence 16 vs. 4
Average sentence length 38 vs. 25
Number of sentences w/out more than 10 words over the average length 8 vs. 4
Percentage of sentences without more than 10 words over the average 17.7% vs. 16%
Number of sentences without more than 5 words below the average 17 vs. 5
Percentage of sentences without more than 5 words below the average 37.7% vs. 20%
Paragraph Length
Longest Paragraph 10 vs. 8
Shortest Paragraph 5 vs. 3
Average Paragraph 6 vs. 5
Overall, my opinion editorial was much different than the professionals. My tone was not as direct and I used a lot of unnecessary information and wording, the professional just stated his main points and was finished without adding any irrelevant detail. This is something that I am working on because I believe my papers would be much better if I would just state the facts. i enjoyed this exercise and it has helped me see that I need to work on my wording in order to make my papers more direct.
2 comments:
I think a majority of us have seen that, just by comparing our own opinion editorial with that of a professionals, we probably don't need some of the details we included in our rough draft.
I agree with you. The professionals tend to be more direct with their writing. I use more words and sentences to state my point than I need to. I need to work on being more concise with my writing.
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