Professional Student Mine Professional
Total number of words 1,118 666
Total number of sentences 56 29
Longest sentence (in # of words) 44 48
Shortest sentence (in # of words) 2 3
Average sentence length 20 23
Number of sentences w/ more than 9 7
10 words over the average length
Percentage of sentences w/ more 16% 24%
than 10 words over the average
Number of sentences w/ more than 19 11
5 words below the average
Percentage of sentences w/ more than 34% 38%
5 words below the average
Paragraph Length
Longest Paragraph (in # of sentences) 14 4
Shortest Paragraph (in # of sentences) 6 1
Average Paragraph (in # of sentences) 11.2 2.4

Overall, my paper compared pretty favorably with the statistics of the professional paper. However, a major difference can be seen in the paragraph lengths. The professional paper had a larger number of paragraphs that were shorter instead of fewer paragraphs of longer length. I think these short paragraphs keep the reader more focused and concentrated on the paper. Sometimes when we read essays, even if they have a good flow, we can lose our focus by the end of a really long paragraph. I like the professional format better because I feel like I can keep my audience interested for longer. The piece was very informative about "green" technologies and wasn't really sarcastic or humorous. I have a bit more sarcasm and blunt words in my essay and I might consider changing some of those.